Glossary entry (derived from question below)
English term or phrase:
Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service payments are made directly between the client
English answer:
Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service, payments are made directly between the client
Added to glossary by
Michael Powers (PhD)
Jul 13, 2007 09:05
16 yrs ago
English term
sentence
English
Bus/Financial
Advertising / Public Relations
Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service payments are made directly between the Client and the Agency.
This sentence (this is an agreement clause) seems to be grammatically incorrect.
Thank you in advance!
This sentence (this is an agreement clause) seems to be grammatically incorrect.
Thank you in advance!
Change log
Jul 13, 2007 11:51: Michael Powers (PhD) Created KOG entry
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Michael Powers (PhD)
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Native in: English
Works in: Spanish to English, Portuguese to English, English to Spanish, and 2 more.
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Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service payment is done directly between the client
and the agency.
Mike :)
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Note added at 6 mins (2007-07-13 09:11:39 GMT)
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"executing" is singular and therefore "are" is incorrect. Moreover, after "every" the singular formis used; hence, it is not "service payments" but rather "service payment."
Finally, not grammatical in nature, but lexical, I changed "made" to "done" since I am assuming that the subject is the execution itself; however, if we placed a comma after "service," then "payment" would be the subject and "made" would be the correct lexical usage.
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Note added at 13 mins (2007-07-13 09:18:58 GMT)
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If the idea being conveyed is that payment is made directly between the client and the agency, and that this is ancillary to the execution of the client's order, then it would be written as follows
Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service, payments are made directly between the Client and the Agency.
A simple comma would clarify everything in this case.
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Note added at 2 hrs (2007-07-13 11:47:19 GMT) Post-grading
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You're welcome, Arcadi - Mike :)
Mike :)
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Note added at 6 mins (2007-07-13 09:11:39 GMT)
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"executing" is singular and therefore "are" is incorrect. Moreover, after "every" the singular formis used; hence, it is not "service payments" but rather "service payment."
Finally, not grammatical in nature, but lexical, I changed "made" to "done" since I am assuming that the subject is the execution itself; however, if we placed a comma after "service," then "payment" would be the subject and "made" would be the correct lexical usage.
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Note added at 13 mins (2007-07-13 09:18:58 GMT)
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If the idea being conveyed is that payment is made directly between the client and the agency, and that this is ancillary to the execution of the client's order, then it would be written as follows
Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service, payments are made directly between the Client and the Agency.
A simple comma would clarify everything in this case.
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Note added at 2 hrs (2007-07-13 11:47:19 GMT) Post-grading
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You're welcome, Arcadi - Mike :)
Peer comment(s):
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Jonathan MacKerron
: a simple comma indeed
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It is amazing how the absence of this comma can cause so much misunderstanding - including my initial response. - Mike :)
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Jack Doughty
: To your second suggestion with the comma.
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Thank you, Jack - Mike :)
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P Waters
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Thank you, Lily - Mike :)
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Polangmar
: As for the glossary, do you really think that someone else will have an identical sentence without the comma?:)
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Thank you, Polangmar - of course not. However, someone will have a different sence without a comma. - Mike :)
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Thank you, Mike:)"
11 mins
add a word
As you say, the sentence as it stands just doesn't work. However, adding a word such as "arrangements" at the beginning improves it considerably - "Arrangements executing the client's order .... are made directly...."
Peer comment(s):
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Richard Benham
: If you just add "Arrangements" at the beginning, you are left with "every deal or service orders" in the middle, which is awkward. The principle of "minimum mutilation" suggests adding a comma after "services"; then you only have a mismatched participle.
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You're right, of course - I should read the text more carefully before jumping in :-)
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13 mins
missing "which"
"Executing the Client’s order on every deal or service payments which are made directly between the Client and the Agency."
Could be another possibility according to your context.
Could be another possibility according to your context.
Peer comment(s):
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Richard Benham
: Leaves a "sentence" without a main verb, among other oddities.
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Have you never encountered such sentences? There is plethora of them, especially in lists
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